FIC: DIY #1 - Voyeur (LotRiPS, Orlando/Elijah, NC-17)

[and_chocolate]

Title: Voyeur
Series: DIY
Fandom: LotRiPS
Pairing: Orlando/Elijah
Rating: NC17
Words: ~1200

Summary: Elijah really should have known better, but he'd been excited and overly enthusiastic—as usual—and it didn't even occur to him that he shouldn't just let himself into the house—Orli gave him a key for chrissakes—and surprise him with the invitation.

( DIY #1 – Voyeur )

Comments

[http://users.livejournal.com/tweedle_/]

I think I might have figured out part of what grabs me about your writing. I love the the way you write Elijah’s mix of inexperience – you cannot call him innocent and I really like that – and his knowingness. His perplexedness and hilarious internal ramble describe the events so clearly. It feels so fresh – like each thought has just occurred to him and none of it was expected. Such a pleasure to read!

[and_chocolate]

*g*

I'm glad you like that internal ramble. I really felt most...connected, I suppose is the best word...to Elijah out of all the actors. I could see where he was coming from and there was a very strong sense of his character that stuck with me.

The rambling was a huge departure for me in terms of writing style, and I think there were some times when it worked better than others. For instance, I think the third story in the voyeurism series is the best, while the first one is the one I'd most like to completely rewrite. In all, though, I think LotRiPS was a turning point, the moment where I made a sudden leap in my writing skills after years of slogging along and only getting incrementally better.